I tried to tell my mom, “Location, location, location,” but she wouldn’t listen.
And now, our new house overlooks the haunted mansion next door.
“But mom, that place looks creepy and covered in soot.”
“It’s just rustic,” she said.
“And why are some windows boarded up? What do they have to hide?”
“Oh, Sherlock. You’re so suspicious.”
Watson rolled his eyes and barked.
“I know, Watson. She’s too trusting. We have our work cut out for us.”
We gathered our surveillance supplies.
And donuts, of course.
After hours of spying, we presented our case.
“What about the eerie orange light emanating from the bedrooms?”
“It’s just the glow from a fireplace,” mom said.
But as Watson pointed out, there were no chimneys.
“There are cages in the attic.”
“Maybe they’re fond of pets,” she said.
“And why is it always dark on the third floor? Who lives there?”
“Maybe it’s just for storage.”
“Ugh. What more evidence do you need?
“Gooooooood Evvvvvvening. Velcome to the neighborhood. My name is Count and this my flatmate, Frank.”
“I rest my case.”
Melissa-Jane Nguyen says
Such a fun story, Karen! Fabulous job at mixing creepy and funny – perfect for kids 😀
Thank you, Melissa! I’m so glad you liked it.
Paul Roncone says
Oh. Em. Gee! This was so fun! I love the allusions. Now I want to name my dog Watson! Count & Frank–classic!
Haha. Thanks, Paul. I’d be honored if you named your dog, Watson.
Colleen O Murphy says
I love this little mystery. You have done a great job developing it in so few words!
Thank you, Colleen! I’m so glad you liked it.
Claudine Pullen says
It’s great I love it.
Thank you, Claudine!
Rosanna Montanaro says
Great mystery, Karen! Your story drew me in, right from the first line. Well done! Very creative! Good luck, Rosanna
Thank you, Rosanna! I’m so glad you liked it.
Anne Lipton says
Such a charming and creative mystery! I love your ingenious notion of Sherlock as a boy, Watson as his dog, and the mom cast as a Mycroft/know-it-all/superior character. But, in the end, Sherlock is validated, and he slays the mystery, as we know he will! Or perhaps be slayed by it . . .
Thank you, Anne! What an insightful character analysis. I hadn’t thought of the mom cast as Mycroft.
Erin McCabe says
I love this! Such a great idea from the prompt. “Location, location, location,” made me crack up!! Best of luck!
Thank you, Erin. I’m so glad you liked it.
Melisa Wrex says
Maybe NOW Mom will listen? Probably not. Just a coincidence, she’ll say. Haha! Great story! –Melisa Wrex @mowrex (Twitter)
Thank you, Melisa!
Carole Barber says
I love it, the whole thing. But the ending sentence is the clincher…. dah!
You have the talent and the sarcasm to totally pull this off.
Haha! Thanks, Carole! I’m so glad you liked it. It was great to hear from you!
Great funny story! I love the opening line!
Mom’s obliviousness is perfect because she’s trying to be non-judgemental but she’s missing all the clues.
Thank you, Katie.
Great work. Loved the story